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More and more people and organisations are using digital technology for contact with other people. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using digital technology for communication?

#people #organisations #technology #contact #communication
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Digital
technology
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are
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 growing rapidly as
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writen
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written
writing
. The number of
people
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 and organisations that
using
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use
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 digital
technology
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 to get in touch with others
also
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grow
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This
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have
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their
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 advantages and
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also
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disadvantages that will be discussed
further
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 as follows. Digital
technology
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sure
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apply
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is a thing that can ease
massive
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 number of
peoples
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life
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. One of the
thing
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 is that for communicating.
With
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 using digital
technology
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, we are able to communicate with
far away
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faraway
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peoples
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people
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and
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without
have
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 to put
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muc
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much
 effort.
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, by using Zoom
call
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, one can attend a meeting online even
thought
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though
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 the other participants are from another continent. 
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, with so
much
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powerfull
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powerful
thing
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things
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 digital
technology
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 can do
,
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 if
people
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 or organizations
getting
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over used
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overused
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 to using
technology
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 especially to communicate, there are
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 disadvantages that will follow. By using
to
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too
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 much
technology
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,
people
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 will
loosing
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 their interest
to do
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in doing
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 real
activity
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activities
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 and
to meet
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meeting
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 real
people
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. Even in
organization
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the organization
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, if the
people
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 inside already being
to
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 comfortable using
technology
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 to communicate, they will not
experiencing
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experience
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 real live talk, because, usually
people
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 use
technology
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 only to talk about something important and urgent, so if they just
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technology
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 to talk to
thers
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others
, they relationships
betweet
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between
 other are just barely for important things, and
this
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 is not a good thing in an organization. In conclusion, the rapid
growing
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 of digital
technology
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 used for communicating
have
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 advantages and disadvantages. The advantage is that it is more reachable for all even though from different
location
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, but the disadvantage is that by getting
over used
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overused
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 to
technology
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,
people
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 can
lost
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lose
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 their interest
to
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in
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 communicating with real
people
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