The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.
The diagram shows the total amount of shop closures and openings between
years
2011 and 2018.
Correct article usage
the years
Overall
, both situations show fluctuations during the years
.
The total number
of shops
closed reached a peak in 2013 with more than 7000 shops
closed during the year. It then
dropped significantly in the 2014 - 2015 period with less than a thousand shops
closed during the year which is also
the lowest of all years
. There was a quick bounce back from 2015 to 2016 and the total number
of shops
closed rose from around 800 to around 5000 in 2016. The number
was hovering at around the same level from 2016 to 2018.
The number
of openings reached a peak at around 8500 in 2011 , it then
decreased dramatically and has
only 4000 Unnecessary verb
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shops
opened in 2012. It hovered at around 4000 to 6000 from 2012 to 2017. the number
of shop openings declined slightly from 2017 to 2018 with only 3000 shops
opening during the year which is also
the lowest among all other years
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