The line graph below show the average monthly temperatures in three major cities

The line graph below show the average monthly temperatures in three major cities
The provided diagram illustrates the percentage of average temperatures for each month across three diverse cities,
Paris
,
Dubai
and Sydney. The temperatures
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displayed in
Celsius
degrees.
Overall
, it is clear from the line graph that
Paris
and
Dubai
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temperature
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temperatures
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significantly rose
during
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April to August
while
in, contrast Sydney's temperature dramatically fell at the same time. Observing the details, it is remarkable that
Paris
has a colder atmosphere than the rest two,
Paris
started at 5
Celsius
in January
then
gradually climbed to reach its peak at 20
Celsius
in July and remained the same in August
then
dropped to 5
Celsius
again
at the end
of the year.
Similarly
,
Dubai
experienced both fluctuations of increased and decreased,
Dubai
began at approximately 18 Celcius surprisingly soared to 35
Celsius
in August and slowly fell to 22
Celsius
in December.
On the contrary
, Sydney started around 25
Celsius
then
met the reduction in July by 13
Celsius
and steadily rose to 23
Celsius
at the end
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, celsius with synonyms.
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