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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign at the primary school rather than secondary . Do the adavantages of this outweigh the disadvantage ?

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. I believe that
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 outweigh the advantages because
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 at that age do not know even their native
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 of education in our country.
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,
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.Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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