Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign at the primary school rather than secondary . Do the adavantages of this outweigh the disadvantage ?

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outweigh the advantages because
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secondary
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,
children
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school
need to learn their native
language
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another
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.
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, when
children
do not know how to read and write in their own
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it is impossible to teach them
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.
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children
who started learning a foreign
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children
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their own
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