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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign language for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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I think that the idea of educating a foreign
language
 for children is very important, for it helps a
child
 have a good basis for development . indeed, if any
child
 learns another
language
language
then
 he will have many good ideas when he goes to school. And when he dialogue with his friends he has many words, and he has a development mindset. More, after the
child
 learns other subjects, the
child
 has a strong point about
language
.
However
, many children don't like to learn a
language
, they
towant
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want
 play some sports. During the time learning the
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language
 the
child
 will be weary
,
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 because in the beginning time have many difficulties. So, in my thoughts, I think the parents need much time to stay with their
child
. We can use some method when the
child
 relaxes or play, the
child
 can watch some cartoon with sub-
language
language
... So, I think it would be nice if many children learn the
language
.
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