The maps below show the changes in a school from 1985 to the present time.

The maps illustrate the transformation of a

school

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between 1985 and now.

Overall

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, the expanded development focuses on buildings, the facilities and roads in the

school

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site. In 1985, there was a large playing field that could easily go to the spacious

car

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park

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connected by the road. On the left

side

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there

were

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was

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a small

car

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park

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and three

school

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buildings namely the office, the library and the classrooms on a line with the entrance. There was another building that had two levels that used to be

classroom

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block

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blocks

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in parallel with the exit and the

school

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had 1500 students. Nowadays, the number of students has risen by just over half. As

the

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result, some of the east

side

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of the playing fields

redeveloped

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was redeveloped

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another

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into another

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classroom

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building

side

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side

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with a

classroom

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block that gets another floor.

However

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, the west

side

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constructed new facilities, specifically a pool, fitness centre and

classroom

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. The library

modernised

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is modernised

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into

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a learning resources centre and inside that there is a computer room. There is no longer a small

car

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park

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in the west area but the office is still there.

Finally

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, the road connected to the playing area is converted to woodland and the

car

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park

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is a bit smaller than before.

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Oct 2, 2023

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park, side, classroom with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

209 words

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