The maps below show the changes in a school from 1985 to the present time.

The maps below show the changes in a school from 1985 to the present time.
The maps illustrate the transformation of a
school
between 1985 and now.
Overall
, the expanded development focuses on buildings, the facilities and roads in the
school
site. In 1985, there was a large playing field that could easily go to the spacious
car
park
connected by the road. On the left
side
there
were
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a small
car
park
and three
school
buildings namely the office, the library and the classrooms on a line with the entrance. There was another building that had two levels that used to be
classroom
block
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in parallel with the exit and the
school
had 1500 students. Nowadays, the number of students has risen by just over half. As
the
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result, some of the east
side
of the playing fields
redeveloped
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another
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classroom
building
side
by
side
with a
classroom
block that gets another floor.
However
, the west
side
constructed new facilities, specifically a pool, fitness centre and
classroom
. The library
modernised
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to
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a learning resources centre and inside that there is a computer room. There is no longer a small
car
park
in the west area but the office is still there.
Finally
, the road connected to the playing area is converted to woodland and the
car
park
is a bit smaller than before.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park, side, classroom with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Significance
  • Accessibility
  • Expansion
  • Facilities
  • Trends
  • Priorities
  • Modernized
  • Well-being
  • Sustainability
  • Transportation
  • Innovative
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