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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 in one city received by the Tourist
Information
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 Office about one
person
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, by letter, email or
telephone
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 over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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, the
enquiries
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 received by the Tourist
Information
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 Office between
January
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 and Jun 2011.
In particular
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, the
information
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 on
person
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 and
telephone
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 strongly increased,
however
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,
information
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 on letters and email decreased. It can be seen from the graph that, the
information
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 about a
person
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 is the shortest about 410
enquiries
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 but between
January
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 and
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March
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March,
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 the
information
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 about a
person
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 has a peak from about 410 to 800
enquiries
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 has dramatically between
March
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 and April from 800 to about 1250
enquiries
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. After having a growth continuous between April and Jun from about 1250 to about 1900
enquiries
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 it was the highest in one city over a six-month period in 2011. The
number
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 of
enquiries
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 received both letter and
telephone
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 have difference. Between
January
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 and February, both have a decline.
However
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, 4 months later both have changed
different
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differently
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. By
telephone
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 had an increase between February and
March
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 from 800 to 1000
enquiries
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. Between
March
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 and April, there was no change but had enormously from 1000 to 1600
enquiries
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.
On the other hand
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, by letter or
email
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email,
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 there was a reduction between
January
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 and May from about 800 to about 400
enquiries
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 but between May and Jun, the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 did not change.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, enquiries, information, person, telephone, january, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 10 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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