The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the
number
of
enquiries
in one city received by the Tourist
Information
Office about one
person
, by letter, email or
telephone
over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
, the
enquiries
received by the Tourist
Information
Office between
January
and Jun 2011.
In particular
, the
information
on
person
and
telephone
strongly increased,
however
,
information
on letters and email decreased. It can be seen from the graph that, the
information
about a
person
is the shortest about 410
enquiries
but between
January
and
March
Add a comma
March,
show examples
the
information
about a
person
has a peak from about 410 to 800
enquiries
.
However
, the
number
of
enquiries
has dramatically between
March
and April from 800 to about 1250
enquiries
. After having a growth continuous between April and Jun from about 1250 to about 1900
enquiries
it was the highest in one city over a six-month period in 2011. The
number
of
enquiries
received both letter and
telephone
have difference. Between
January
and February, both have a decline.
However
, 4 months later both have changed
different
Change the adjective
differently
show examples
. By
telephone
had an increase between February and
March
from 800 to 1000
enquiries
. Between
March
and April, there was no change but had enormously from 1000 to 1600
enquiries
.
On the other hand
, by letter or
email
Add a comma
email,
show examples
there was a reduction between
January
and May from about 800 to about 400
enquiries
but between May and Jun, the
number
of
enquiries
did not change.
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  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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