Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers remain the main source of news for the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
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advantage compared to other information channels. Even though most people still read
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newspapers
in their daily
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, I believe that
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are getting their daily updates
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social media
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. In my point of view, I moderately disagree with the old-fashioned
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keeping abreast
to
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news
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. On one hand, social media no doubt
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revolutionise various industries for several years, which mostly regards
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the younger generations who
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grown
with
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computers and smartphones, resulting in authors and journalists
to spend
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time and effort on online
news
rather than hard-copy ones. Beyond that, another reason for
Internet
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to get popular is to
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latest
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news
with objective perspectives, because of the free-speech area that
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internet
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ensures society
while
adults commute their work.
For instance
, most political
news
in developing countries
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mainly and
firstly
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rather than
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in newspapers
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. Another reason is,
online
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news
offer
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people a nonstop source and opportunity for society to criticize objectively, rather than sided journalists.
On the other hand
,
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industry creates
enourmous
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enormous
amount
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of
paper
waste
at the end
of the day which has a negative environmental impact on
climate
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crisis.
Although
there are sustainable improvements
such
as biodegradable
paper
alternatives,
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industry ought to
keep
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accountable, unless governments track their waste disposal.
In addition
, it could be a beneficial step to combat
paper
waste and curb the excess amount of
paper
production. In conclusion, I believe that getting informed via
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internet
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are
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getting
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more and more common and traditional
newspapers
will be
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obsolete
in the
following
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years.
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, I argued
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and downsides of
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news
and explained why I moderately disagree on
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newspapers
as
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sources of
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news
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.
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