Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some people argue that
the
governments should ban Correct article usage
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to
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aims
to Change the verb form
aim
children
. I completely agree with Use synonyms
this
view because Linking Words
childrens
can easily Correct your spelling
children
manipulated
and gain unhealthy habits.
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be manipulated
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complete
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on
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twenties
. Especially, during primary Change the article
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schools
, pupils Fix the agreement mistake
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of
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cruticial
thinking and Correct your spelling
critical
they
are open to manipulation from every channel. Correct pronoun usage
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Furthermore
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focuses
on Correct subject-verb agreement
focus
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the children
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children's
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the
cartoon characters with a product, they tend to Correct article usage
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wants
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product
from a child that Fix the agreement mistake
products
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are harmfull
harmfull
to themselves with Correct your spelling
harmful
low quality
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low-quality
material
which include toxic chemicals or plastics.
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materials
On the other hand
, food companies use Linking Words
those
manipulative marketing strategies. Foods can easily Correct determiner usage
apply
reached
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be reached
children
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in
anywhere without having parents and Change preposition
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thus
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availibility
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availability
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increases
increase
selling Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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chances
changes
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chances
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for Correct your spelling
especially
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the junk
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food industry. Correct article usage
the junk
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will cause Linking Words
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serious
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issues
such
as obesity, Linking Words
diabeties
and cancer. Correct your spelling
diabetes
For instance
, some Linking Words
of
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apply
the
governments already banned Correct article usage
apply
advirtesement
activities in Correct your spelling
advertisement
advertisements
food
industry and Add an article
the food
start
to give Wrong verb form
have started
educations
to families about reading Fix the agreement mistake
education
ingredient
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the ingredient
section
of junk foods before Fix the agreement mistake
sections
buy
that products Change the verb form
buying
to
their Change preposition
for
childrens
.
In conclusion, I believe that the governments should take Correct your spelling
children
immadiate
action to restrict marketing activities that Correct your spelling
immediate
focuses
on Change the verb form
focus
young
population. Correct article usage
the young
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