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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed much to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor recommending someone in your community. In your letter describe who the person is and how you know them; describe their contributions to the community; explain why you think they deserve the reward.

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Dear Sir or Madame, I'm writing in regard to the article
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 spot in your newspaper which claimed the intention to reward individuals who have contributed to the community. My suggestion is Mr Ali, who lives in the purple house on Nizami Street. During the
last
 decade,
this
 person has planted over a thousand trees and flourishing bushes across all streets in the vicinity of Sahil Park.
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, he invested in
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 process and built the well, which is currently used to water all green lines and trees within the city centre. I would like to propose his nomination as he is a very humble and selfless person who never asked for appreciation or reward for his efforts. In advance, he pets many animals which used to be stray and could be diminished by the authorities unless someone adopted them. I hope my letter will persuade some of you that
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Ali is a prominent citizen who had a great impact on our local community. Sincerely Yours, Gabi
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logic
Organize the letter in a more logical structure. Start with introducing yourself and your relationship with Mr. Ali before describing his contributions and explaining why he deserves the reward.
tone
Use a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a letter to a newspaper editor.
structure
Develop and expand on each idea in separate paragraphs to improve cohesion and clarity.
vocabulary
Use more varied and precise vocabulary throughout the letter to enhance the language.
grammar
Review the grammar and sentence structures to ensure accuracy and fluency.
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