The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to

the college site in the future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words
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The diagram depicts the
the
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present and the future map of a college building.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the college architecture and map will
get
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completly
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completely
changed and the number of classrooms and
space
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for the car park will be increased. First of all, the present entrance is in the north direction near the garden but later it is beside the road in the south.
On
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One
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noticeable feature is the expansion of the college block, it will be extended to occupy the entire area of
garden
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the garden
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and
foothpath
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footpath
.
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, the
space
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designated for recreational
purpose
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purposes
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, namely
garden
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the garden
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and
foothpath
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footpath
, will no longer be there.
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,
due to
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the increase
of
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the size of the
building
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the car parking
space
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on the right will
also
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increase and there will be
space
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for numerous cars.
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but not least, there will be myriad shiftings of rooms. Indeed, the number of classrooms will
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increase from three to five, but the size will be
diminshed
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diminished
. The reception can be seen as soon as crossing the entrance. The toilets and library will
also
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be shifted but the lunch area and bus stop
remains
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will remain
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in the same position.
Also
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,
opening
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the opening
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of a new shop will be done by the year 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words space with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • architecture
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • facade
  • landscaping
  • expansion
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • pedestrian
  • vehicular traffic
  • demolition
  • construction
  • recreational areas
  • commons
  • atrium
  • courtyard
  • upgrade
  • sustainability
  • commute
  • ingress
  • egress
  • blueprint
  • survey
  • layout
  • zoning
  • modernization
  • conservation
  • integration
  • footprint
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