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Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration

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In
this
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 digitally advanced era, many countries are spending millions on space research every year, and
this
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 amount mostly belongs to the treasury of the
country
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, which consists of money earned from taxes.
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 these achievements in astrophysics help to decode the unsolved questions of our solar system,
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 not solve any issue related to the citizens. On the one hand, space exploration is an important landmark of the development journey for any
country
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 in the
world
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.
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, a successful mission, by these research organisations, plays a vital role in solving the mystery of the universe.
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,
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 exploration becomes the pride for the nation that gets appreciated everywhere. The Mangal Mission of India,
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, was the only Mars journey which they achieved on the first try, and it was welcomed by the whole
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.
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, many regions of the
world
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 need to focus on their internal problems on priority but the rulers of
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 areas are interested in investing a big portion of the budget in exploring the stars. Though there is no impact on the nation's development after launching any rocket into the sky, some governments are hungry for respect from the
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.
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, the hard-earned money of every citizen is getting wasted on
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 useless experiments.
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, in Moscow, protests on a large scale were seen when Russia launched their moon mission in July 2023 because billions of rubles were
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 used for it during the war situation.
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, knowing the unsolved part of the universe is an acceptable
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 respectful achievement for the
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,
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 a welcomed result is not going to improve anything for the citizens of that
country
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • tax payers
  • technological advancement
  • scientific knowledge
  • economic growth
  • national prestige
  • long-term survival
  • financial investment
  • pressing needs
  • risk to human life
  • environmental concerns
  • space debris
  • immediate returns
  • allocation of resources
  • aerospace
  • engineering
  • habitable planets
  • breakthroughs
  • fuel industries
  • inspire
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