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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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depicts
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 underpass railway system
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 of different urban areas. The oldest underpassing railway infrastructure belongs to London
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 Tokyo has the largest commuters per
year
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, The newly constructed systems have
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comparatively
 less range
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. London underground rail lines opened in 1863 and It is the longest route. It's travellers sum is under 1000 though.
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,
paris
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 has 1191
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 per
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 but Its route is under 200 kilometres. Tokyo has the largest number of people to carry per 12 months. It was established in 1927. There are some smaller
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 and people carrying
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trains
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 in the cities can be seen
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. Though Washington DC is occupied by 126 kilometres of rail path, It shows only 144
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, they contain yearly. Kyoto and Los Angeles are newer in
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 field having only 11 and 28 kilometers of railroad and only 45 and 50
passengers
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 in one
year
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 use the system. All the statistics of
passengers
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 in a
year
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 are counted in
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millions
million
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