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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back. Things to include: - Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. - Polite. No one responds to insults. - Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? - Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Manager, I would like to express my dissatisfaction with the service that I received at your establishment
last
 night, please allow me to explain. The table was booked two months back to cater my
friends
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 birthday party but when we arrived, we were informed by the
matire'd
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 that tables were no longer available and we
have
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 to dine separately.
In addition
, there were no vegetarian menu options available which has
made
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left
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 one of our friends
left
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to eat just bread and butter. Considering all these incidents, I
was
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decided not to pay for the order,
however
, your employee told
that
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me that
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 they would call
police
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 if the bill was not paid. So, to avoid
further
 embarrassment, I was compelled to pay the bill amount. I would request you to refund the billed amount considering the quality of service provided by your staff at the restaurant. I am totally devastated by the experience which has ruined my celebration party. I look forward
hearing
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 from you at your earliest convenience.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, RIA
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Ensure the logical structure is clear and well-organized throughout the essay.
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Provide more specific examples to support your claims.
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Use a more formal and polite tone throughout the letter.
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Clearly state what you want to happen, such as a refund or compensation.
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Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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