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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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Some individuals in society have an idea that when they are purchasing items or getting a
service
, the first priority should be the amount of
money
 spent
for
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 it. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement because I believe that when we buy a
product
 or
service
, we first have to think about the
quality
 of the
service
as well as
 the
product
.
Secondly
, one should consider the cost of the item or
service
in contrast
 with the
quality
 of the
product
 or
service
. If we need to purchase a cellphone, usually we take a look around the market and get a good idea of the market price of the particular item.
According to
 my view of
this
, we have to gather information as much as possible, which is
also
 important. As per others' views, we can select a
quality
product
 or
service
. Sometimes we experience that the item we bought is not durable or does not meet our requirements if we consider only
money
. As an example, if we are planning to spend our holy day in a hotel, we have to think about the
service
 they provide
along with
 the price.
Otherwise
, we could be faced with unexpected problems
such
 as security problems and the
quality
 of the food they served. If we give priority to the
money
 without thinking, the results will be worse.
Finally
, I would like
to conclude
 that
money
 is not the most important factor when buying items or services; the most valuable factor is the
quality
 of the
service
 or
product
 we get.
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