In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. they say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

„We live in
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time
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“ you can hear often on
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, in schools,
while
sitting on
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in
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or on television.
On the other hand
, older generations think and say that they lived in more stressful times but that they coped better with everyday situations. The question is
does
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people suffer from stress more
today
than they did in the past?
Informations
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today
through media fast run and get to everyone every second
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the day. Every person is notified within a second if something
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is happening in their country or on the other end of the world. Through mobile
phones
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you can read all kind of
informations
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information
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of
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all around the globe and that
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availability
cause
pressure
from
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stressful
and devastating news.
In addition
,
pressure
today
is coming from social media
such
as
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Instagram
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and
facebook
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where everyone
are
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portraited
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as succesfull
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succesfull
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successful
and
good looking
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. On
one
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side youngsters are forced by
parents
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their parents
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to have good grades to
enroll
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incollege
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in college
and on the
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they „have to“ follow trends and look good to fit in friend groups.
On the contrary
, people before didn't
had
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cellphones and they weren't worried
what
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about what
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friends from school
are
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were
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thinking about their „popularity“. They were under
pressure
from
parents
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their parents
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to finish school as soon as they
can
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so they
can
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find a
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job rather than
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they would love to do.
Furthermore
, youngsters had to gain
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even before
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their 18th
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Birthday so they
can
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start giving birth to children as soon as they
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.
In
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that time it was
embarassing
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embarrassing
having
first
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child after
21
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being 21
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year
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old. With everything that has been said, I think that people
today
are too
sensibile
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sensible
sensitive
and that generations before felt more
pressure
and stress but they coped better. I think they weren't
so
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as
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fragile
like
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today
's generations.
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