Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year', before they begin work or univeristy and see it as a chance to broaden their hoizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The spare time before beginning work or university can be a valuable time for travelling to obtain numerous

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experiences. A few people think that it can be an opportunity to leverage it by strolling around to varied destinations

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others assert that it won't result in any advantage but throwing the money away. I believe with careful consideration, the expenses they pay will pay off with the life lessons.

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with,travelling can improve the way they see things. By experiencing a few changes in the environment, they can take a lesson and become a more mature person than before.

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view wonderful scenery from the top, they will learn that nice thing needs some effort to achieve.

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, the freshers can feel more gratitude if they go to the backwoods place,

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as Africa, and they will learn that the easy access they have nowadays is an important thing to others.

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is indeed just an extravagant behaviour. If students just visit a big city,

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as a mall or cafe, they can retrieve the experiences from that. They need to select the destinations carefully. As an alternative, if they have no destination to go to,

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they can wait for university life to start

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learning a few things at home. In conclusion, the students will obtain precious lessons from travelling and exploring places.

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, they need to pay attention to which places they want to visit.

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