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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
provide
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the
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apply
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information about the percentages of
Gross
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the Gross
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 Domestic Product from
IT
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the IT
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 and
Service
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industry
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 in the UK between 1992 and 2000.
Overall
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, both the IT and
Service
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industry
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 experienced an upward trend throughout the period.
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 the
GDP
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 of the IT
industry
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 exhibited fluctuations, its growth was comparatively higher than that of the
Service
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industry
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. Swedan's
GDP
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 was about 6% in 1992, being higher than
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Service
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the Service
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industries
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industry's
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GDP
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 by approximately 2%.
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, it rose to over 8% in 1994.
However
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, the figure showed a slight decrease, falling below 8%.
In contrast
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, the
GDP
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 had a steady growth during the next four years. It rose to approximately 12% in 1996,
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 increased by around 3% in 2000 .
Service
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 Industries Gross Domestic Product was 4%, which is comparatively lesser than
IT
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the IT
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 sector.
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, by the year
1994
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it's
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its
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 Gross Domestic Product
have
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 increased more than one and
half
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a half
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 times. From that year onwards, it saw very modest growth over the next 6 years,
finally
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 reaching around 8% by the end of the period.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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