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The graph and bar chart below show the average monthly rainfall and temperature for one region of East Africa. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The graph and bar chart below show the average monthly rainfall and temperature for one region of East Africa. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The charts depict the typical temperature (in degrees Celsius) and how much it rains each month in a specific area in East Africa.
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, it is seen that the rainy weather occurs mainly in April,
whereas
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 the highest temperatures are in March and October.There is little to no rainfall in the
summer
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, September, January and February,
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similarly
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 the coldest period is
also
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summer
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.
According to
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 the bar chart, rain is uncommon during the
last
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 two months of winter (approximately 15
millimetres
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) and in the
summer
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 (less than 10
millimetres
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) . As opposed to the temperature, which is from 21.5 to 23.5 degrees Celsius during winter and 20.5 to 21 during
summer
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. Rain is seen regularly in April, which constitutes the highest point of nearly 300
millimetres
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 and the weather is moderate roughly 23.5 degrees and is the same in October.
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, rain frequency is often in October and November (around 150
millimetres
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),
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 it accounts for about 25
millimetres
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 in September. From the beginning
of
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,Autumn it starts to get warmer in the East of Africa,
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 it decreases as the Winter comes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words summer, millimetres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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