The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia
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The given pie charts depict the different ways of getting
news
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in
two
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the two
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commonwealth countries.
Overall
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, Most
of
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apply
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Australian
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Australians
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access
news
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from
internet
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,
while
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for
Canadian
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Canadians
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, television is the main
source
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of
news
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.
In
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the other hand, the amount of
news
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that people in both countries receive is from the unspecified
source
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.
To begin
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with, the
proportion
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of Australian surfing
news
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from online
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source
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sources
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is 52%. It dominated the other methods
such
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as TV (37%) and printed
news
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(7%). Only 2% of people in Australia
who
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apply
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listen to radio
news
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.
Meanwhile
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in Canada, the vast majority of the people watch television
news
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. Surfing on the internet is the second
favorite
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favourite
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way of accessing
news
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for
the
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apply
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Canadian
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Canadians
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with
the
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a
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proportion
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of 36%. Printing
news
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and radio take up 14% and 7% of the
proportion
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respectively. Both
Australia
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Australian
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and
Canada
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Canadian
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citizen’s least favorite way of accessing
news
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is from unspecified
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source
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sources
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. In Canada, the
proportion
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is 3%,
while
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in Australia, the number is only 2%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words news, source, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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