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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates percentages of three European countries, namely
Germany
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, the
UK
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 and Spain who have
internet
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 connection to their households from the year 2007 to 2019.
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, all the three countries had experienced a steady upward trend over the
period
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. The
UK
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 and Spain households always have less percentage of
internet
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 connectivity compared to
Germany
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. In 2007, about 70% of the houses in
Germany
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 had
internet
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 access.
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, the figure showed a gradual increase to 90% by the year 2013, and it continued to grow steadily to the end of the
period
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, reaching around 93% in 2018 and hitting
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 highest point of about 95% in 2019. At the beginning of the
period
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 the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 had around 60% and 42%
of
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internet
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 connectivity to their houses respectively,
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 by the year
2015
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,2015
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 both countries had significant growth to around 80%
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then
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at the end
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 of the
period
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 the
UK
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 households had almost 92% and Spain had 90% connections to the
internet
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. They had rapidly increased by almost 40% and 60% respectively by 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, uk, internet, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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