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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people have been choosing to buy based on the brands which are popular for the items of clothes,
car
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 and so on. In
this
eassy
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essay
, the reasons behind
this
 trend
happening
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and
negative
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the negative
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 impacts
on
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this
 development will be discussed. In
this
 modern world, people tend to show off their possession
on
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the
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material things and value
on
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this
 perspective rather than valuing intangible
human's
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 qualities
such
 as honesty, rightfulness and internal well-being.
In addition
, there are a lot of modernized cars in terms of engines, looks and facilities in the market
due to
 advanced technology.
Similarly
, clothes and other things are produced more and more in the competitive trading world.
Thus
, people have
variety
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 of choices and need to make a decision to buy the right one. Famous brands are usually perceived as having
the
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better quality compared to the normal ones.
Overall
, there are a lot of negative impacts
due to
this
 purchasing habit, buying the popular ones except the fact that there is the convenience for customers to make a choice without thinking too much.
Firstly
,
monopoly
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monopolies
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 in the business world can
be happened
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 and entrepreneurs for small businesses will
be vanished
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vanish
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 eventually if most
of
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consumers
are decided
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 to go for the popular ones.
This
 may lead to
loosing
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 jobs for the workforce working in
the
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 certain industry.
Secondly
, consumers are
likley
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likely
needed
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 to pay extra for the goodwill and name of the brand on top of the things that they buy. It may
effect
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 to household budget and
saving
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 for the future. In conclusion, whether to buy famous brands or not will
be depend
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 on the financial status of the
individuals
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individual
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Brand loyalty
  • Investment
  • Aspiration
  • Trendsetter
  • Affluent
  • Mimicry
  • Conformity
  • Identity
  • Self-esteem
  • Status
  • Perception
  • Advertise
  • Promote
  • Influence
  • Peer pressure
  • Societal expectations
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