Nowadays parents are moving to other countries for work leaving their kids home. Some people say that this decision is unwise while others believe it's rational. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Raising and nurturing a human being is truly a
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, not only it requires a huge amount of mental
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but
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mentally
is a
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issue, financial
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is
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problem. Let's leave the psychological part out of the
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for specialists to judge and focus on the financial part. When money is tight, the most common and obvious decision a parent can make is
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abroad, where opportunities are far superior, but of
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it creates a
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. Leaving a
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without one or both parents' attention would most
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wellbeing
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and development. Child-parent relationship is
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of the most crucial bonds a human urges to form and maintain, without it,
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creature
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can feel lost and
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, which would make adaptation to life a
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, no doubt.
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, a parent
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makes a call to leave a child, must have
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, right? There are some extreme situations, where looking for a better income in a foreign country is basically the only solution. It is better
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little to no chance for a child to be fed, dressed and educated in the future. The issue is complex and I'm sure there is no right answer or universal
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. In my opinion, separation from children must be
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option when parents
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how to provide and make a living, they should explore all the possibilities and scenarios where they would be able to work and raise a child.
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, I won't be quick to judge a person, because you never know in which circumstances they were put and what kind of challenges they had to face.
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