The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

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The pie chart represents how many

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percentages

percentage

of native speakers of

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different

diferent

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different languages

lenguages

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languages

lived in

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canada

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in 1996, 2006 and 2016

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it is clear that

in 1980

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english

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by 70

persentages

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of all native speakers. The second place takes

Urdu

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the Urdu

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language with 15

persentage

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percentage

Not

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big differences

betewen

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Urdu and Chinese languages. Some significant changes

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pie

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chart in 1990. English

persentages

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percentages

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decreased to 55 % meanwhile

other

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lenguages

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languages

speaking humans number was the same as in 1980.

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of people who have Urdu

lenguages

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languages

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as a native

speach

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speech

was higher by 13

persentages

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percentages

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comperisson wiht

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comparison with

1980

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years.

It is clear that

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the Chinese

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increased by 2

persentages

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percentages

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in general both pie charts it is seen that 15 %

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in Canada.

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