The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

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The pie chart represents how many

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persentages

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percentages

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of native speakers of

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different

diferent

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different languages

lenguages

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languages

lived in

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Canada

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canada

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in 1996, 2006 and 2016

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it is clear that

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in 1980

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english

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by 70

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persentages

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of all native speakers. The second place takes

Urdu

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the Urdu

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language with 15

persentage

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percentage

Not

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big differences

betewen

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between

Urdu and Chinese languages. Some significant changes

represents

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pie

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the pie

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chart in 1990. English

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percentages

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decreased to 55 % meanwhile

other

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the other

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lenguages

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languages

speaking humans number was the same as in 1980.

Number

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of people who have Urdu

lenguages

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languages

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as a native

speach

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speech

was higher by 13

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percentages

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comperisson wiht

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comparison with

1980

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years.

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Chinese

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increased by 2

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percentages

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in general both pie charts it is seen that 15 %

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native

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in Canada.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words persentages with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

128 words

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The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

More and more children are becoming obese. What are the causes of this and what are the solutions.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measure do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that secondary or highschool student should be taught how to use money management as it is an important lifeskill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Nowadays in many countries people are following the latest fashion , hairstyle and so on. Why are they so influenced by fashion? Is it a positive or negative development?

Across the world, local shops are closing due to losing customers to online competitors. What problems does this produce? And what solutions can you suggest to overcome them?