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The present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future

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The provided maps illustrate some changes that have been planned
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college’s infrastructure over the period of 20 years. It is noticeable that three crucial modifications have been made to the college’s division of sections. These have involved the addition of car
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 areas, the disappearance of the footpath and garden and the classroom’s supplement. Looking at the changes in more detail, we can see that there is a footpath and garden on the top side of the map at present. These will be no longer present in 2020, and
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 , we can see that the areas of the car parks will be enhanced and the section of amenities will
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 be extended. It is obvious that the maps show alterations associated with the evolution of the number of classrooms. At present, there are three wide classrooms built on either side of the map,
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, not only the number of classrooms will be escalated by 2 rooms but
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 its area will be prone to diminish vigorously. The two maps
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 show that the changes are allied with the position of reception , toilet and library.
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, the existence of the shop will be disposed to alter the lunch area’s extent in 2020.
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, the positions of the bus stop and the road have been maintained
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 20 years.
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