Some educationalists think that a programme of international exchange visits is beneficial to all teenage school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

All teenage
shool
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students
are believed to be
beneficial
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from a programme of international
exchange
visits by some educational experts. To my personal opinion, I strongly agree
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statement which will be discussed in
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in
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eassy
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easy
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Firstly
,
students
can learn cultural and
tranditional
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traditional
variences if they go to study as an
exchange
student in some other countries.
This
may lead to having knowledge
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a variety of differences and
understanding
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an understanding
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on
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historical value among countries.
In addition
,they would have emotional bonding with friends
who
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they meet during their visit by sharing and exchanging the
custom
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, history,
belief
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and so on.
Thus
, expanding their social circle
also
would have achieved.
Furthermore
, another benefit which international
exchange
students
can
be received
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is that travelling experience alone
such
as freedom and independence. To elaborate
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,
students
are required to stay far away
without
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their
family
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and they have to arrange all the things including house chores by themselves.
As a result
, personal development can be improved and their confidence level will be higher enough to go to any other countries around the world to work after finishing their programme.
To conclude
,
government
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should encourage
to
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the
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colleges and universities to arrange
exchange
programme
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for
the
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students
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • beneficial
  • teenage school students
  • international exchange visits
  • opportunity
  • experience
  • different cultures
  • broaden horizons
  • diversity
  • learn
  • appreciate
  • language skills
  • communication abilities
  • interactions
  • develop
  • global perspective
  • cultural sensitivity
  • foster
  • lifelong friendships
  • networking opportunities
  • boost
  • self-confidence
  • independence
  • contribute
  • personal growth
  • development
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