The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care

their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting

the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram gives a distribution of the period spent by
parents
in
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caring for their wards at night in 2022.
Overall
it is immediately apparent that
,
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women give more
time
to
activities
involving their
children
than men.
Also
, with
both
parents
coming together,
chances
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of them spending more
time
in
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carrying out some
activities
in
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with
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their
children
is
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are
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higher.
To begin
with, when it comes to mothers they spend approximately 75% of their
time
to dress up their kids whilst only a third of
this
figure at 25% is invested in the games their offspring play. Meanwhile, mothers apportion 50% of their
time
getting involved in doing the homework of their kids.
Likewise
, spending 42% to prepare these
children
for bed. With regards to
both
parents
, 50% of the couple's
time
is used to put their
children
to sleep.
By contrast
, only less than a half of
this
period at 20% is used to dress their
children
.
However
,
both
parents
use 70% of their
time
to partake in their wards playing games a figure which
surpases
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surpasses
the
time-frame
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time frame
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both
parents
involve themselves in
childrens'
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activities
. Turning to fathers only, they give the least
time
to their
childrens'
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children's
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activities
. 10% of their
time
is used to help with
kids
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kids'
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homework whilst
a
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half of
this
for
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playing games with their
children
as well as
preparing them for bed. Very little
time
, about 2%, is spent on putting clothes on their offspring.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, time, activities, children, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Parents
  • Spent time
  • Taking care
  • Children
  • Evening
  • 2022
  • Summarise
  • Information
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Relevant
  • Patterns
  • Trends
  • Highest
  • Lowest
  • Activities
  • Gender
  • Conclusion
  • Findings
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