It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes Do you agree or dis agree?

I have chosen to return to study life because I think that age does not matter in

this

field. During my academic gap years, I have worked for three major companies namely Neva Data Solutions, Esmsys Pvt Ltd and S K Consultancy.

Furthermore

, I have learned how to grow a business from small scale to large scale which shows my ability to work in different workplaces. Here are some of the key abilities which I have learned Fast and accurate typing speed, Basic and advanced Excel, Microsoft Office tool, Team management, New product development, Tally and computer skills, Work performance, Process improvement and good team leadership.

Additionally

, I need to expand my business ability more that’s why I have chosen

this

course.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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