Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

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UK
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for my
further
study.
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,
UK
universities
is
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the best academic
standard
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in the world.
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,
UK
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provides a great place to get a high-quality
education
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in
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affordable cost and
government
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has made it easier than ever for students to access affordable
education
.
Lastly
, the admission process
of
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UK
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is very easy and
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get
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visa
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without any problem.
Moreover
, not only
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system but
UK
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provides some other benefits
such
as
high
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level of security,
better
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healthcare system and many more. - There are several reasons to
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London. Studying in London will put me at the heart of the places where I can
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quality of life improvement with the help of
education
.
Additionally
, studying in London will give me the opportunity to meet a wide range of professionals, both my course and career. Even though, there are some key advantages of studying in
this
city like the city is full of culture and diversity, central travel hub of visitors, theatre and music, famous
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to see and many more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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