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The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.
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The diagram illustrates the proportion of the total global populace in
India
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,
China
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,
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
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 in 1950 and 2002. An extrapolation has been done for the year 2050.
Overall
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 it is immediately evident that
China
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 and
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India
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 have more people compared with the USA and
Japan
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.
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, all the countries were most populated in 1950 and the figures dropped except for
India
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 which had the least populace in 1950 and observed increased
population
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 growth.
To begin
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 with, the
population
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 trends across
China
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, the USA and
Japan
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is
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 similar as all 3 nations observed a decrease in
population
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 numbers.
China
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's inhabitants started
of
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 at about 23% in 1950, by 2002
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 figure was down by 3%. It is estimated that
China
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's original populace will fall by 8% in 2050.
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Similarly
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,
Japan
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 had only 3% of individuals in 1959. 2002 saw a decreased value
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of
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 almost 2%. Meanwhile, 2050 is predicted to record a
further
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 decrease in
Japan
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's
population
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 to about half of its initial figure. America
on the other hand
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, had about 7% of citizens. Interestingly, 2002 recorded 5% and
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 is expected to stay
same
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the same
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 even in 2050.
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,
India
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's
population
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 which has been increasing over the years having 15% in 1950 and about 17% in 2002 is predicted to surge to nearly 20% by 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, japan, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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