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you have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in an Australia. For someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter the couple, in your letter: explain why you think you would be suitable the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

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Hello Mrs. and Mr. I am Ali from France. I have seen your advertisement on the TV. That's why, I wanted to write to you about myself. I have been teaching France language for 10 years.
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, I have a language school for young people.
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 me, I am suitable for
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 role and I can use my experiences.
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, I can help your children with their homework.
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, I can teach another language for them. As far as I understand you need to young worker for
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 job. I am 25 years old and I am single.
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, I am an outgoing and active person. I believe that I can provide all the skills that you need.
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,I am waiting for the response. I use my phone or Instagram, you can contact me
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 of them. I hope that I can take
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greeting and closing
Make sure to format the letter properly with appropriate salutation and closing. Also, use formal language throughout the letter.
logical structure
The letter lacks clear paragraph organization. Each paragraph should focus on a specific idea or topic.
task achievement
Provide more details on why you think you would be suitable for the job. Include specific qualifications, experiences, and skills that make you stand out.
coherence cohesion
Expand on what else you could do for the family. Consider mentioning any additional skills or services you can offer.
task achievement
Elaborate on your reasons for wanting the job. Explain your passion for teaching and interacting with children.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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