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Some people think that robots are important for humans’ future development. Others think that robot have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In the contemporary era of technological revolution, the introduced robotic
machines
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 are considered the most
concerned
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 innovations.
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 some innovators believe that the presence of
robots
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 has brought considerable benefits to humanity, other opponents argue that there are plenty of disadvantages have emerged
due to
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 the advent of
robots
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.
This
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 opinion, the proliferation of robotism serves in substantial aspects
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the
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life and brings
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number of
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advantages,
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however
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 it leads to
other adverse impact
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 on nations.
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robots
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 poses a hazardous impact on
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 prospects. To elaborate
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this
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, it has been witnessed that industries have an extreme reliance on robotic
machines
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. That, in turn,
have
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 influenced
on
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workforces, resulting in redundancy and
unempolyment
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unemployment
.
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,
while
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 manufacturers, in order to
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productivities
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productivity
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,
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myriads of tasks in minutes, robotic
machines
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 have superseded employees. Eventually, an increasing number of
labours
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stifled
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 by unemployment.
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 why,
robots
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 have become an immense dilemma.
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, it should be
there
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 regulations, and
policy makers
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policymakers
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 have to legislate
law
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laws
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 to protect
labours
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labourers
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, ensuring parallel prospects for breadwinners
along with
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 retraining them to cope with artificial
intelligant
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intelligence
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 the other hand, it is irrefutable that
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 of
robots
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 offers
plethora
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 of benefits in a wide range of life aspects. In the first place, in
envirenmental
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environmental
 risks and vulnerabilities.
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 there are extreme
drought
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, forest blazes and flooding that can prone
human
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humans
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 to
threat
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threats
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, in
such
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robots
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 can redeemed by people.
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, recently when media has highlighted some drone
earoplanes
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aeroplanes
, flying to detect flaming forests in Australia and America, acting as an essential factor
to overcome
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 the crisis.
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,
robots
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 play a vital role when replaced by
human
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humans
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 in serious situations in all fields.
To conclude
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,
while
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 the existence of robotism jeopardizes
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the
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nations when they
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 replaced by
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humans
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human
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humans
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 in
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the workforce
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workforce
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the workforce
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, albeit
this
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 can be managed by
decision makers
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, introducing robotic
machines
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 can support
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in
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medical to
avoide
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avoid
 infections,
industies
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industries
 to increase outcomes and explorations .

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Your opinion

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