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International travelhas many advantages to both travelers and the country that they visited. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to
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 an advancement in
transport
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the transport
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 sector,
the
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global tourism has bloomed , and it provides a
numver
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number
 of benefits to the visiting
country
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as well as
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tourist
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tourists
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. From my perspective,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
an international travel travel
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international travel travel
an international travel journey
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 outweigh its disadvantages.
Although
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 some issues related to crowd and safety are associated with touring the world, for the destination
country
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 the revenue generated from it, and for
visitors
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 the experience gathered in different regions of the world has a significant value. On the one hand, people say that the global explorations by excited backpackers
is
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 damaging the
beuty
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beauty
 of the place to which they
visits
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visit
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. Admittedly,
wee
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we
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 have seen
the
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a
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 rise in
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the crowd
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crowd
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crowds
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 at many famous destinations nowadays, and
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, the harmony of
region
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the region
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 gets disturbed by many polluting factors.
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, some travel attractions are becoming unsafe for international
visitors
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. During the
Worldcup
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World Cup
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 in Brazil,
for instance
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,
capital
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the capital
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 city Rio was marked as the filthiest town
of
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in
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 the
country
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as
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and
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 many incidents were reported regarding theft from
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foreign
visitors
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.
On the other hand
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,
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector is one of the major contributors
for
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 the
econimy
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economy
 of many leading nations.
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 the
travelers
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travellers
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 from many other countries,
foreign
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 exchange comes in to boost the economy of the region.
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, these visiting individuals get a chance to
knmow
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know
 the culture, fashion and festivals from different
corner
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corners
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 of the globe.
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, the annual budget of Switzerland,
an
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a
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 European
country
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, targets
top
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to
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 spend
minimum
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a minimum
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10
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of 10
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% of total tax earnings from the treasury on maintaining
as well as
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 developing
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tourist spots, and in return, the government is getting
hefty
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 amount from
traveling
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travelling
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 people.
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,
an
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international exploration by voyagers could harm the places they visit, and sometimes
visitors
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 might face an unpleasant experience there.
However
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, the benefits like money
as well as
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 cultural exchange hold more importance than the above drawbacks.
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