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Traffic jams are a problem in many towns and cities today. Some people say that the solution is to build wider roads. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, one of the most popular problems in big cities is overcrowded
roads
.
Due to
 that, some people believe that if the government makes
roads
 wider, it will decrease the number of jams. In my way of thinking, it is not
only
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 possible solution
of
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this
 issue and, in
this
 essay, I am going to prove my viewpoint with several arguments.
To begin
 with, it is necessary to understand that it is impossible to remove buildings which are close to the
roads
 in some towns.
For example
, it is utterly difficult to transfer
the
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 huge structure which contains a lot of shops and apartments. Because of that, if the government decide to relocate a few houses, it will produce a lot of different problems from
the
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finding
the
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new living areas to
the
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investing a huge amount of money
on
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it
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.
On the other hand
,
cities’
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cities
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 administration can use other ways to reduce the number of cars
roads
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on roads
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.
For instance
, one of the most effective modern solutions is the underground railway system. If citizens have an opportunity to use cheap and fast trains, they will not need to utilize cars which are related to petrol expenditures. In conclusion, I would like to say that it is not necessary to spend much
investments
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 on road reconstruction, if there exist other possible solutions which are cheaper and easier to be done.
Nevertheless
, if the driveway is
real
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 to be reconstructed, it should be accepted as a preferable solution because of
many
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 benefits
which
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 it has for drivers.
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