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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below
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The chart illustrates five different companies investing
into
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in
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 developing countries from 2008 to 2011.
Overall
, it is seen that
2
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the 2
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organisation
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organisations
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invest
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invested
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 the most in 2011 with a bit more than 2.5
billion
dollars
,
also
 in
2010
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,2010
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 they
invest
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invested
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 around 2.4
billion
dollars
.
Company
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Companies
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 under number 3 have
investing
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invested
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 1.5
billion
dollars
 each year, but with little
fluctiations
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fluctuations
fluctuation
 in 2009 they
invest
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invested
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 around 1.7
billion
 and
then
 diverged to a bit less than 1.5
billion
, but ended up with
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an upwards
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upwards
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 trend and stabilized.
Organisation
 4
have
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has
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 given
the
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less, after 2008 they have
invest
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invested
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 around half a
billion
dollars
 into developing countries.
Organisation
 5
have
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has
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gradual
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a gradual
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 period of downfall trend from 2008 with more than 1
billion
 to 2011 with lower than 0.5
billion
dollars
.
Organisation
 1 followed a roughly complementary pattern expect 2009 for an extended period to 2011. To summarise all
given
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the given
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 information,
organisation
 2 have
invest
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invested
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 the most
to
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in
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 developing nations, on
other
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the other
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 side
organisation
 4
have
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has
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invest
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invested
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 the
less
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least
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words organisation, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount of money
  • developing countries
  • organisations
  • from 2008 to 2011
  • given to
  • funding
  • analyze
  • examine
  • discuss
  • evaluate
  • explore
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • trends
  • data
  • chart
  • purpose
  • overview
  • key findings
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