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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The pie charts give information about
units
 of
electricity
 production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. In Australia, the most resource used in 1980 was coal with almost 50
units
then
 there was nuclear
power
 about 20.
Furthermore
, another source was natural gas with 20 and
to conclude
 oil. In 2000, we had a huge change in fact the total production had increased by about 170 with an increase
about
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 coal about 130 and a decrease in the two sources. In France, we had a different situation in 1980, Natural gas and coal were the most
source
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sources
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 used with 25
units
 of
electricity
 and
then
 there were oil, nuclear
power
 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
, respectively 20, 15 and 5.
For
instance
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 in 2000, Nuclear
power
 was becoming the majority of
electricity
 with almost 126
units
. All in all, there was a lot of change
on
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in
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 the different fuel sources for making the amount of
electricity
 in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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