There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that
,
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non-academic subjects, like physical
education
and
cookery
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,cookery
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should
remove
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from
school
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the school
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syllabus
so that
student
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students
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can concentrate on academic work because it
is
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giving lot of pressure on young
people
to succeed
on
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academic
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the academic
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sector.
However
, I
am completely disagree
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with
this
statement because
students
should
taught
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all kinds of
education
to be successful
on
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life
.
To begin
with,
people
argue that young
people
getting
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lot
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a lot
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of tension to
successful
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be successful
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on
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academically because there is
extra
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the extra
an extra
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syllabus
. I think
students
should taught
according to
there
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their
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wish and interest so they can be succeed
on
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their
life
. If there is not physical
education
and cookery some
students
does
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not get
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a change
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change
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chance
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to take their
interested
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apply
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subject
.
For example
, if some
students
want to be cook and they want to be chef they can not if
school
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the school
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syllabus
remove that
subject
therefor
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therefore
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,
education
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system has to give
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to all
students
to
take
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read and practice
according to
their will.
In addition
, I think young
people
should not only succeed academically but
also
need to
successful
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be successful
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physically and practically.
For instance
, academic is only
use
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used
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for passing the exam not in real
life
.
For example
, my brother have passed BBA but he have no knowledge about how
do
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business
on
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real
life
and I have to
taught
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him about
real
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real-life
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life
problems and how we have to do
costumer
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customer
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service and take benefits
on
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of
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our hard
life
. In conclusion,
all
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apply
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we should not remove physical
education
and cookery
subject
from
school
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the school
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syllabus
instead
we need to add more and more extra
subject
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subjects
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so all
student
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students
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get
chance
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a chance
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to be what they want to be in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pressure
  • succeed
  • academically
  • non-academic
  • physical education
  • cookery
  • school syllabus
  • concentrate
  • academic work
  • well-rounded
  • enhancement
  • practical skills
  • balanced education system
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