There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that
,
non-academic subjects, like physical Remove the comma
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education
and cookery
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,cookery
remove
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be removed
school
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the school
syllabus
so that student
can concentrate on academic work because it Fix the agreement mistake
students
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puts
people
to succeed on
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in
academic
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the academic
However
, I am completely disagree
with Change the verb form
completely disagree
this
statement because students
should taught
all kinds of Change the verb form
be taught
education
to be successful on
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in
life
.
To begin
with, people
argue that young people
getting
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get
lot
of tension to Change the article
a lot
successful
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be successful
on
academically because there is Change preposition
apply
extra
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the extra
an extra
syllabus
. I think students
should taught according to
there
wish and interest so they can be succeed Correct your spelling
their
on
their Change preposition
in
life
. If there is not physical education
and cookery some students
does
not get Change the verb form
do
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a change
the change
change
to take their Correct your spelling
chance
interested
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apply
subject
. For example
, if some students
want to be cook and they want to be chef they can not if school
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the school
syllabus
remove that subject
therefor
, Correct your spelling
therefore
education
system has to give Correct article usage
the education
opportunity
to all Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
students
to take
read and practice Verb problem
apply
according to
their will.
In addition
, I think young people
should not only succeed academically but also
need to successful
physically and practically. Add a missing verb
be successful
For instance
, academic is only use
for passing the exam not in real Change the form of the verb
used
life
. For example
, my brother have passed BBA but he have no knowledge about how do
business Add the particle
to do
on
real Change preposition
in
life
and I have to taught
him about Change the verb
teach
real
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real-life
life
problems and how we have to do costumer
service and take benefits Correct your spelling
customer
on
our hard Change preposition
of
life
.
In conclusion, all
we should not remove physical Correct determiner usage
apply
education
and cookery subject
from school
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the school
syllabus
instead
we need to add more and more extra subject
so all Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
student
get Fix the agreement mistake
students
chance
to be what they want to be in future.Correct article usage
a chance
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