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You were doing a short course at another country. All of a sudden, you had to leave the course and fly back to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher, and in your letter – express your gratitude – explain why you had to leave – explain what part of the course you enjoyed the most

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Dear Mr Ali,
Firstly
, I regret to inform you that I have to leave the course and fly back to my home town today. Unfortunately, I did not have enough time to thank you for all the efforts you made in
this
 course,
additionally
, is worth mentioning that I have learnt a lot from you in
this
 short period.
Secondly
, I received a phone call from my brother to tell me that, my grandfather is in critical condition, and he asked to see me as soon as possible;
therefore
, I booked the first flight for today, and I decided to write you
this
 letter.
Moreover
,
although
 I attended only 2 months from the course, I learnt a lot about investing in the international markets;
consequently
, I decided to communicate with you for
further
 information. By the end, you will find my phone number written on the back of
this
 letter, and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Ahmed Elnahhas
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal greeting and closing in the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your writing.
grammatical range and accuracy
Check the sentence structure and make sure they are grammatically accurate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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