Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreing languahe at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advanantages of this outweight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include some relevant examples.

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These days, it is increasingly popular to know more
that
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one
languages
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language
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so parents are looking for
the
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apply
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unversities
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universities
who
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that
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can teach children when they are in
their
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apply
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primary
school
. Some people
belive
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believe
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school
can start their classes when they pass out from primary
standerds
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standards
. I completely agree with
this
point of view and
i
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will discuss
in
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it in
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below
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the below
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paragraph.
Firstly
, it is
easiery
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easier
for the
childern
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children
to get
familar
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familiar
with
foregin
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foreign
language
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languages
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when they are in primary classes. As teachers can play with the child and show them the
alphabate
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alphabet
and when they start to communicate with them kids will be familiar with words which may improve the
leasening
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learning
power.
For example
,
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Nowadays
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, many
school
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schools
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are showing animated short
movie
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movies
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and when pupils see
it
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them
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they start to understand the words.
Secondly
, when experts did the survey between primary and secondary students they found out that who started the
foregin langauage
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foreign language
when they were young it was easy for them to understand it. As they
havebeen
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have been
practicing
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practising
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since childhood and
biggest
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the biggest
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help for them is their parents who speak with them in
different
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a different
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language
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languages
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which build their confidence in them.
For instance
, there was
a
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an
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American
famiely
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family
who
migraint
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migrant
to Germany and they wanted
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their
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her
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their
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son to be good
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at
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in
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at
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the german
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the german
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German
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german
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language
they
start
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started
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comunicate
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communicate
with them in
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German
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german
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and he
become
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became
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good
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better
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day by day.
On the other hand
, these
reuired constaint
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required constant
parents
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parents'
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support
as well as
teachers and for the
kidas
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kids
extra burden.
However
, if they start to
teeach
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teach
other
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another language
other languages
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language
in
secondary
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a secondary
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school
as a result
student
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students
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can be amazing but it will take
alot
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a lot
of time
perhapse
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perhaps
can take years.
Furthermore
,
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the youngster
a youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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will feel demotivated
and
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which
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couse
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cause
them
a
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apply
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stress. It is challenging for the
student
as well as
for the
school
.
Nevertheless
, many
student
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students
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study hard and learn faster but
this
needs practice and
speeking
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speaking
practice which can be done if they speak in that specific
language
.
To sum up
,
although
,
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apply
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it is easy for the primary
student
to learn faster as they are speaking as they class one
while
,
secoundary
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secondary
students require more
efforts
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effort
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and
this
outhweigh
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outweigh
outweighs
the disadvantages.
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