The internet is the best way to know about different things around the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

These days, the
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internet
is extremely important for
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. It
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the global in
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our world
. Nowadays, most people
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the best tool for
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different needs. I totally agree with
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statement and will state
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. On
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hand,
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modern
countries provide
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the web
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to communicate with others around the world.
For example
, young people use
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to
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with friends,so that it shows
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and
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intelligent
way.
In addition
, the teacher exhausts to studying and illustrates their
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presentation
. To clarify, when
Covid19
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COVID-19
spreads, the public spend the online learning
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like Google Meeting and Glassroom management. It is
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successful
instruction and
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organisation
for homework.
Thus
, some companies work at home.
Although
work at house is dull,
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women
have
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time to
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with their sons and
also
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own responsibilities
such
as dishes and cleaning.
On the other hand
, some people prefer to read at tab, because they can find the subject and what they search.
Moreover
, can
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that
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technology
control human: folk got
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the online
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book for reading;
however
, it is
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.
Therefore
,
entertainment
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industry is a part of life. Crowds obtain films and
cartoon
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.
For example
, if
teengers
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teenagers
do not go to
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cinema
, they can discover
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website. It earns money from Snapchat and Instagram. They made
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advertisement
advertisements
or
shop
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shops
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or
instituation
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institutions
. In conclusion, in my view, I strongly, agree
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internet
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the internet
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is vital in our society. population employs
this
internet as a dvisor.
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