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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited • Describe where you stayed and what you can do there • Provide one negative aspect about the destination Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,

#friend #holiday #destination #•recommend #place #aspect #addresses #___
Dear Maria, Hope you’re pink in health. I’m happy to hear that
finally
 you’re taking a break from your busy work schedule and planning for a holiday trip,
also
 I am very pleased to recommend a destination. I would suggest you go to The Havelock Islands. Since I have been there for my honeymoon early
this
 year. I have really loved that place and especially as you’re a water-lover
this
 would be the perfect vacation that you will cherish for your lifetime.
Moreover
, there are many adventurous water sports to experience, Snorkelling and Scuba diving is my favourite.
In Addition
, the hotel we stayed in is worth mentioning. The staff were more friendly and hostile. Its name is Sterling Resort which we have booked for Five nights and Six days ,they have provided us with one large suite room with a private swimming pool costs around $1200 per night. I am happy to share the manager's contact.
Finally
, one inconvenience that we faced during the whole trip was the commutation. Since we need to travel only by boat, they all operate based on a time schedule so we were not able to explore a few places as they wind up early in the evening. Looking forward to hearing about your memories from the holiday. With Love, Andrea.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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