A country becomes more interesting and develop more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extend do you agree pr disagree?

Our journey began with a visit to Phu Son
Church
, a place
religious
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significance.
This
was our first destination, and we arrived at
4:00
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4:00
AM, following a long and tiring journey in a tourist car. By 7:00 AM the next morning, we enjoyed a breakfast,
while
Parish Priest Josheph Nguyen Hung Loi provided us with an introduction
this
Church
. Phu Son
Church
, constructed in 1934, stands as a testament to the faith of the humans it serves. In its early days, it sheltered 800 Christians and bore witness at Tay Nguyen region during wartime. Remarkably, the
church
's physical structure remained. Father Josheph emphasized that it was the protection of Our Lady Mother. The local their livelihood through agriculture, cultivating coffee plants and rice fields. They belonged to various ethnic groups. As you can see in the visuals, their way of life was simple, generosity, and a charming simplicity in their behavior.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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