You are working in a restourant and you have decide to leave your current employment.Write a letter to your employer.

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health and the best of spirit. I am writing

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about I want to quit my job. Because I

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move away

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. So I have completed my studies and am going back home to my parents.

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my job. On the other side of the

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I work as a waiter. But I graduated from university. I want to work in my

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faithfully Sarvinoz

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coherence cohesion

Ensure the logical structure of your letter by organizing your ideas into paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

Use an appropriate greeting and closing for your letter.

coherence cohesion

Each paragraph should focus on a single idea and provide supporting details.

task achievement

Provide more details about why you want to leave your current job and why you want to work in your specialty.

task achievement

Use a more professional and formal tone in your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: <4

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

133 words

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You are working in a restourant and you have decide to leave your current employment.Write a letter to your employer.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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