Some people say that mobile phone should be banned in public places. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Presently, despite the numerous benefits
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phones, there are people stating that phones should be prohibited in
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. From my perspective, I disagree with
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statement owing to
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of utilizing
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fundamental rights One of the factors the phone should not be banned is the necessity of utilizing
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the phone. Mobile
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part of our
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as
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help with numerous things in daily life, including navigation, communication, and education. It is the easiest technology to access around the world, it might need just
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to search,
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it is small enough to carry it all around.
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, in cellphone has
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application called map, which
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us
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navigators,
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of using the real map as it is hard to use and find.'
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, even though some people might say that it should be banned in
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environment,
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it is their fundamental
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. Someone might not feel good about that but they can choose to just not
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it in
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setting. They should have
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rights
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to use the electric device wherever, as they should have their own choice about what should they do as long as it is not against the laws.
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, they should care about some places, for
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, cinema, car, or library, as it might disturb someone else or
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driving. In conclusion, the phone should not be banned for two reasons, it is one of the devices which is useful for daily life, and another reason is regarding fundamental freedoms which everyone should have.
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