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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Whats your opinion about it?

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Nowadays, there are several methods to transfer
information
,
for instance
, visual images or diagrams
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 in the morning news. Several experts say that images are better than words. Personally, I agree with
this
 opinion, and the following content will list the reasons. The images can illustrate simple but clear
information
 than words. Usually, we
use
abundance
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 of language to describe the details of a situation,
however
, a picture or a chart can
use
 only one page to present the same
information
.
For example
, the reporter prefers to
use
 some pictures of the events with verbal
description
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 in the news rather than pure verbal
information
.
In addition
, humans understand
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visual input more
effective
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 because of the brain. Recently, some scientific research
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 that human
use
 70% of the brain to transform visual
information
, which
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 the knowledge we learn
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 majorly
rely
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 on our eyes.
For example
, comparing the learning speed of understanding the
use
 of items and the meaning of words or phrases, the former
one
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will easily
know
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 by infants because they are born to know the usage of their eyes, as for the language, they will need more training about it. In conclusion,
due to
 the simple but clear details which are brought by the visual
information
 and the organs we have since we were born, the picture will be an effective
methods
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 to transfer the
information
.
As a result
, if people want to make an easily
understanding
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 presentation, they better combine their report with pictures for the audience to simply learn the knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convey
  • emotions
  • capture
  • attention
  • evoke
  • impact
  • context
  • detailed information
  • journalism
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