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the chart below shows the changes that took place in three differetn areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the changes that took place in three differetn areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph indicates how the pattern of crimes evolved in different
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 in Newport
city
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City
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 between 2002 and 2012. There are
represented
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three
kind
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 of infractions,
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 the black continuos line describes that the number of incidents per burglary had their peak in 2004. Later they diminished drastically until 2004 when the trend has been stabilized.
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, the broken line illustrates the pattern
in
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 car
thefting
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thefts
theft
 in the inner city, which had a meagre decrease in 2006,
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, after that has returned to increase to the original number of violations in 2012.
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, the dotted line, that outlines the robberies, has not registered relevant variations in its trend. In conclusion, the only type of offences that have manifested
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progress is burglary, whilst car theft and robbery have been contained.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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