In the recent decades wildlife populations and plant species have suffered a global decline. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions?

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We already know that there are many animal and plant species that have become extinct nowadays. Here in my country, Indonesia, there is an animal called Java Tiger. Back when I was little, I could see Java Tiger with my own eyes, but now it can only be seen from the internet or a picture.
This
also
happens with Orang Utan. In 2000, I think I met Orang Utan on the street when I went on vacation and needed to go across the jungle. But now I need to go to the zoo just to introduce Orang Utan to my little sister. There are plenty of reasons causing
this
problem. In my opinion, the first one is that wildfires happen often these days. Some of them need more than a month to subside the fire. Ironically, forest fires often happen because of summer, which usually causes the temperature to increase by 5 degrees. If I pull the thread to the root cause, it is not because of summertime. It mostly happens because global warming, like we already know, makes ozone thinner than it should be. Some said that there are unknown people who burn them and are irresponsible with their actions. The second reason that came up in my mind is there are people who like to hunt ancient species. They can be sold at a very high price on the black market. There are many beautiful and colourful species that live in the forest. Some rich people just want to captivate them and raise them in their big houses. But you need to pay the regulation for just keeping ancient animals. I don't have any deep knowledge about these wildlife things or global warming, but since I know that one of the root causes of
this
problem is global warming, the solution that I proposed will be to work on that. We can reduce the use of air conditioners that use CFC for their cooler
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since CFC is bad for the ozone.
Besides
that, we can use public transport to go from place to place, so that we contribute to reducing pollution. Another solution to propose is to do a massive promotion about the importance of our wildlife for our earth. As I wrote above, we absolutely don't want to see a beautiful creature just from its picture right?
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