Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or oragnisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days, some people prefer to have

own

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their own

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business

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rather than being

employee

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employees

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who

working

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work

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for a company. In

this

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essay, some related reason

that

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apply

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why

this

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phenomenon

occur

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occurs

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is argued.

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, some cons of

self-employment

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are presented.

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with, many people tend to land a proper

job

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when applying after graduation.

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, after finding a

job

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, some injustice in the workplace including

gender-inequality

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gender inequality

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matters and pay gaps

triggers

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trigger

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the mindset of working for

own self

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oneself

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Taken

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Take

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for example

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facing an individual

that

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apply

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the

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whose

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lack of knowledge and maturity is obvious in his/her decisions. Suppose that

such

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a superior manager gains three times as much money as a skilled specialist.

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is the turning point

that

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when

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the specialist feels demotivated to pursue the career path and try to find another

job

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. If

such

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job

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applicant experiences

this

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again

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and again, the notion of being

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self-employment

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self-employed

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own

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owning

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business

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a business

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establishment comes

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into

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her/his mind.

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, some women feel that they cannot rise through the rank in a macho subculture, and

this

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therefore

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forces

her

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them

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to change

her

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their

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career

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careers

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to build

her

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their

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own

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business

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businesses

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, rarely does advancement in own career proceed without any struggle. In

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regard, making a profitable

job

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or keeping a

business

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alive

require

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not only adequate skills but

also

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being a step ahead of competitors and counterparts. Not paying proper attention to the basics of starting a

job

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, some newly established businesses and start-ups failed before celebrating even the first year of launch

due to

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bankruptcy.

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may be owing to

lack

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a lack

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of financial support and

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business

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a business

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plan. In terms of psychological aspects,

the

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apply

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economic fluctuations may dramatically influence the small-size

business

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and all the stress accumulated by risks and pressure

resulted

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resulting

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from

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starting

the

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new

business

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can negatively impact

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apply

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the founders so

that

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apply

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it will make it difficult to wind down even after a considerable

while

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To conclude

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although

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being

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apply

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self-employment

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may free

the

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apply

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individuals from some

feeling

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feelings

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unfairly

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being unfairly

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compensated or gender inequality conditions, the founders should shoulder the side effects

such

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as financial risks of

self-employment

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and mental pressures.

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grammatical range accuracy

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for instance
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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351 words

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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or oragnisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowlede or experience.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The metro is the most convenient way to get around a city. Do you agree or disagree?

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