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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The provided line graph illustrates the data about the proportion of the
population
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 in four Asian
countries
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 between the period of 1970 to 2020, with the future predictions for 2030 to 2040.
Overall
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, there are four
countries
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 Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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. The number of people increased and will increase in all
countries
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 over the era.
Malaysia
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 will be the number one country in terms of
population
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. In 1970, the
population
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 of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Malaysia
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 was almost the same about 30%. In 1992, the number of people in
Malaysia
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 surpassed
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and reached
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approximately 75% in 2020. In 2040, the
population
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 will be at more than 80%.
On the other hand
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, the
population
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 of
Malaysia
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 reached
at
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around 43% in 2020 and will be at more than 50% in 2040. In 1970, the
population
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 of
Thailand
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 started at less than 20% and
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Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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population
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 was at around 13%. In 2000, both
countries
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was
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were
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 at the same percentage about 28%
then
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 the
population
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 in
Indonesia
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 rose and reached
at
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approximately 50% in 2020. The
population
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 of
Thailand
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 remained the same in 2020. Both
Indonesia
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 and
Thailand
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 in the future will be at approximately 60% and 45% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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