Some companies have started giving their workers exercise equipment to use in their break time. Do you think all companies should do this, do you agree or disagree?

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have begun to give their employees gym instruments to use during rest time.In my own opinion,I disagree with
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theory as illustrated below.
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kits to their staff to practise
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of resting.I
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against
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idea .I am of the opinion that
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individuals should be
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free from
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physical ,mental or
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emotional
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during break time.
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once read in the newspaper.It stressed that folks need to step out completely from
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area when they are on pause.It stated that
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helps the mind to
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rejuvenate
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of the break
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disagreeing with the topic.
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,the staff needs to mix and mingle and remove stress .Mentally ,
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will help the mind to refocus and maybe deal with personal issues an individual might be dealing with. When
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the phrase 'more
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and less play makes
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a dull boy'.I would like to interpret that it
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the mind needs to reorganise by relaxing which can be categorised to an
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liking.
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is why some organisations have lounge rooms equipped with
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rooms, showers,video games,beds and
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activities that one can take advantage of when they are on break.
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disagree
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with the topic.
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can be concluded that,the step that has been taken by some employers to hand over
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to their workers to use during their rest time is not a good idea as elaborated above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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